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Mid-January At The Liquor Store

July 6, 2021 11 Comments

By Stephen G. Eoannou

It’s mid-January at the liquor store. The holiday season is over. Wine has already been bought for Thanksgiving and Christmas dinners. Gifts of scotch and bourbon and schnapps have been rung up and wrapped or shoved in gift bags weeks ago. Bulk purchases for parties, full cases, and splits are a memory.

~

There are few customers. They are all stocked up on Dewar’s and Jack and Canadian Club given as gifts or left over from parties. Lake Erie is colored like lead and matches the sky during the day. It’s dark when I wake and dark when I drive to work. It’s the time of inventory, of counting bottles on the shelves and full cases in the backroom. It’s the time of washing and dusting and vacuuming and ticking off days until March 17th and Easter and Mother’s Day when customers will return.

~

A mix of sleet and rain pisses on the city. Chet Baker plays on the radio under the counter, his trumpet cool and slow. The door opens, the bell above it ringing for the first time in hours, and an ancient Polish woman waddles in dressed in black, a babushka wrapped around her head. She blinks, startled by the fluorescents and glass bottles lining shelves and catching light, and unwinds her headscarf. Her face is deeply wrinkled. Dark circles raccoon her eyes. She asks me in a voice thick with Warsaw, or Krakow, or Treblinka if I have a good wine for cancer.

~

Hail is pelting the front window now, driven slanted by wind coming off the lake. I’m eighteen years old, working at the family store, and doing the best I can. There is no wine that’s good for cancer, and I don’t know how to respond. My dad clears his throat, looks at her with tired eyes, and says, “Right this way, missus,” delivering the line like he’s said it a thousand times before. He takes her over to the discount bin. He walks with a limp from a broken leg that healed shorter after a fall in the parking lot two Januarys earlier. His right shoulder is higher than his left from years of carrying cases of booze on it. He picks out an inexpensive Merlot past its prime. He tells her, a couple glasses after dinner will do the trick.

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Comments

  1. Ephra Behn says

    July 6, 2021 at 8:57 AM

    Brought me close to tears with this vignette. Nicely done.

    Reply
  2. Beverley Heilbron says

    July 7, 2021 at 8:11 AM

    It’s telling rather than showing but I enjoyed the read.

    Reply
  3. Beth Uznis Johnson says

    July 7, 2021 at 8:13 AM

    “Lake Erie is colored like lead and matches the sky during the day.” Beautiful!

    Reply
  4. Susan Stuart says

    July 7, 2021 at 1:12 PM

    This is Hemingwayesq. Hemingway said,
    “weather is important in a story.” Your weather descriptions are good. Also, in a Hemingway fashion, you use short and long sentences intertwined, making the story easy to read and creates a rhythmic flow. I loved it. This had everything: good descriptions, an emotional pull, and clear content.

    Reply
  5. Isabelle says

    July 7, 2021 at 1:50 PM

    Gorgeous lines that have an emotional impact “dark circles racoon her eyes.” I enjoyed how you described the setting. It felt like I was in the liquor store when the father suggested Merlot.

    Reply
  6. Jenny says

    July 7, 2021 at 3:22 PM

    You’ve got excellent details here to convey the place and time of year. And for being so short, this story conveys a deep poignancy!

    Reply
  7. Chris Ritter says

    July 7, 2021 at 3:43 PM

    Damn fine writing. Damn fine.

    Reply
    • Miss L says

      July 26, 2021 at 6:59 AM

      Peaks fan?

      Reply
  8. Judy says

    July 7, 2021 at 8:21 PM

    The impact and long term impression that an event like this can make on an 18 year old: appreciating the gravity of cancer, the empathy of his father, and seeing his father’s limp as imperfect and a result of “life” really touched me.

    Reply
  9. Peter Farrar says

    July 9, 2021 at 1:06 AM

    Full of atmposphere through this story.

    Reply
  10. Lanne says

    July 12, 2021 at 8:29 AM

    I’m a sucker for stories of human compassion, especially the small ones that are nearly invisible. Thanks.

    Reply

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